Almost, cyberhater. I've changed a lot of the dialogue, etc. I've done a lot to the script in general, but have kept lines like Anon qouted. I will be uploading a segment soon. And I've changed the title to: The Rise and Fall of Harry Valentine.
It'd be shorter, punchier, and since I'm assuming the film remains in the crime/gangster genre, would be reminiscent of titles like 'Serpico', or 'Rampart' (new Woody Harrelson cop flick)?