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  1. Hasmap

    Right, I've added the first 34 pages(of a 110 pages) of my script Die Today to Live Tomorrow into the file exchange. Now, please bare in mind that this is not the finished article and i am polishing it up as we speak. But I would greatly appreciate any feedback on the story, the content, etc. and what you guy's think of it.

    1. Cyber Hater

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      1st of all...fix those damn typos. They're whole wrong words in there. 2nd...don't start a script with a VO and use "dames" in it. Reaks of novice noir writer

    2. Elliott79

      Elliott79

      It is riddled with typos, grammatical errors and unclear paragraphs. I read eight pages then had to stop. I'll PM you a list of the errors I found: there are at least six on page 1.

    3. StringerBell

      StringerBell

      I skipped reading based on the grammatical errors in the request. It's "bear in mind" and "guys" should not have an apostrophe. I don't point these out to be rude, but to demonstrate that grammatical errors turn off readers, including buyers.

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